Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

In my heart’s clustered town

I am livin'

I am living.

Some tears rolled down..

In my heart’s clustered town.

They cause movements.

I’m living.

I’m loving.

….~.~.~.~…

They rolled further down

To the center of the town.

They cause commotions

I’m dying.

I’m dead.

.

And yet they traveled more

To the point that made me sore.

They made me live again!

I’m dead.

I’m living.

© Copyright: Maria and Moniba

P.S. Thankyou Moniba for the superb additions to my writing.

79 responses

  1. They rolled further down
    To the center of the town
    They cause commotions
    I’m dying
    I’m dead

    July 13, 2013 at 11:47 pm

    • Shucks.

      July 13, 2013 at 11:47 pm

      • And yet they travelled more
        To the point that made me sore
        They made me live again
        I’m dead
        I’m living

        July 13, 2013 at 11:50 pm

        • My cousin is super-amazing. You left me speechless! You made me publish this thing I wrote for you, and look what you have done! Amazing. Beautiful!

          July 13, 2013 at 11:55 pm

  2. 🙂 Hey… You set the pattern! So the credit is all yours. Thanks, btw.

    July 13, 2013 at 11:58 pm

  3. Ain Riz

    beautiful

    July 14, 2013 at 12:01 am

  4. Reblogged this on Ordinary girl's peculiar blog and commented:
    A compiled effort by Maria and me.

    July 14, 2013 at 12:16 am

  5. wow! This is really beautiful ! Very nicely written….leaves an impact on heart while reading ! Lovely work by both of you guys ! I love you both together🙂 Stay Blessed always🙂 xx

    July 14, 2013 at 1:13 am

  6. Love the poem and your site thanks for stopping by to say hello at mine, look forward to the art connection.

    July 14, 2013 at 2:29 am

    • Thankyou so very much for your kind words! I am so glad you liked it!🙂
      Keep visiting! And I really love your blog! =)
      -Maria

      July 14, 2013 at 6:10 pm

  7. Ain Riz

    Reblogged this on A page from my diary and commented:
    A beautiful and heart touching poem by a lovely blogger Maria Imran

    July 14, 2013 at 4:24 am

  8. Ain Riz

    My heart’s clusterred twon… I cant seem to have enough of this. Reading and re reading this beautiful piece.

    July 14, 2013 at 9:06 am

    • Thanks a million Ain Riz! You are awesome! And your comment means a lot to me.=)
      -Maria.

      July 14, 2013 at 5:31 pm

  9. wow this is so lovely ! Very beautiful words….Leave an impact on heart as I read it ….. You two have done a marvelous jod. Love you guys together🙂 Keep it up ! xx

    July 14, 2013 at 12:08 pm

    • Thankyou lalarukh for your amazing words! They leave an impact greater.😉
      Lots of love =)

      July 14, 2013 at 5:36 pm

      • Love You guys🙂 *Hugs* xx

        July 14, 2013 at 5:56 pm

        • Lalarukh we live in the same country! Why can’t we meet and hug?🙂

          July 14, 2013 at 5:57 pm

          • Heheh sure sure why not ? You have to come to fsd for this then😀 I am afraid of Karachi😛

            July 14, 2013 at 5:58 pm

          • Afraid of Karachi? Please don’t say that! The city lapse video might help you falling in love with it!😉

            July 14, 2013 at 6:00 pm

          • I am sure about it ! But what I hear daily in news makes me sad….and scared too:-/

            July 14, 2013 at 6:00 pm

          • The ‘scaring’ events happen everywhere! It is up to oneself to understand ‘behind the scene’ stories..

            July 14, 2013 at 6:02 pm

          • Yeah I know…I love every city of my Pakistan and I pray for it to get better !

            July 14, 2013 at 6:04 pm

          • I do too! =)

            July 14, 2013 at 6:05 pm

          • 🙂 Every thing will get better inshAllah🙂 xx

            July 14, 2013 at 6:07 pm

  10. This is so cool. The lil girls I knew have officially turned into poets. Keep making me proud. =D❤

    July 15, 2013 at 1:56 am

    • Wow Somaiya! Shukrya from the bottom of my heart😉
      Your appreciation means a lot- to both of us!

      July 15, 2013 at 8:24 am

  11. Reblogged this on wild innocence…. and commented:
    An awesome work of my awesome friends. Poetry’s got a bright future, guys!😀

    July 15, 2013 at 2:01 am

  12. Simple, fluid and powerful. Struck some chord with my recent nostalgia.

    July 15, 2013 at 7:27 pm

    • Thankyou for your striking feedback! Glad you liked it. =)

      July 15, 2013 at 7:42 pm

  13. Sheer brilliancy, Maria and Moniba!

    July 17, 2013 at 11:02 pm

  14. Sara Motiwala

    Hi Randomly abstract!
    Love this beautiful emotional poem. Simply fantastic!!! Great effort by both of you.
    Loads of love.🙂

    July 18, 2013 at 1:21 am

    • Thankyou loads Sara! Your appreciation means a lot!
      Love,
      Randomly Abstract.🙂

      July 18, 2013 at 2:01 am

  15. wow. you write really well ! i loved this poem

    July 18, 2013 at 2:54 pm

    • Thankyou so much dear Sam. Your appreciation for me is a treasure!🙂

      July 18, 2013 at 9:21 pm

  16. Reblogged this on acablogger.

    July 18, 2013 at 2:55 pm

  17. I’m seriously baffled by all the feedback here…

    July 18, 2013 at 10:39 pm

    • Haena? I am surprised too! Five reblogs, can you imagine that?😉
      Wesy when are we writing something again?!

      July 19, 2013 at 6:31 pm

      • Hahah.. tum start karo. I’ll see if it inspires something in me😉

        July 19, 2013 at 6:33 pm

  18. BEAUTIFUL!!
    Brilliantly and beautifully written by Maria And Moniba!
    Loved it till the end.
    Keep it up!

    July 19, 2013 at 10:25 am

    • Thankyou (multiple to hundered times)
      Your visit and your appreciation means a whole lot, to both of us!🙂
      Pleased that you liked it!

      July 19, 2013 at 6:19 pm

      • I love it! Would love to read more so will be looking forwards for future posts😀

        July 21, 2013 at 10:58 am

  19. Reblogged this on SahrishS.

    July 19, 2013 at 10:26 am

  20. Marvelous poem…. Thumbs up🙂🙂

    July 25, 2013 at 10:02 pm

  21. WOW! amazing!

    July 27, 2013 at 9:33 pm

  22. O Maria! what an awesome line.” I am dead and I am living”
    great work author- pierces through the soul.

    October 6, 2013 at 10:07 pm

    • Thank you Pamela!
      This work is a result of collective efforts, by me and my cousin Moniba.🙂

      October 6, 2013 at 10:10 pm

      • ok! miss Magnanimous is also honest. This shows!
        Loving you more.
        Dont blame me if I stalk your blog from now on.😛

        October 6, 2013 at 10:12 pm

        • Haha honest I am.😉
          I would LOVE your stalks’ and visits! And there is a surprise coming for you. Stay tuned.

          October 6, 2013 at 10:17 pm

  23. rjl2727

    this is extraordinary. the arrangement and content pierce the heart.

    October 18, 2013 at 6:46 am

  24. They have now traveled miles
    Got absorbed and emerged as smiles
    They now become the carriers of joy
    I’m happy
    I’m alive

    ===================================================================

    A small and late addition🙂

    October 27, 2013 at 8:14 am

  25. And as I now read the conversation between you and lala… What exactly is/was happening in Karachi? I have also heard of such ‘Karachi Burning’ stories mostly on discussions on Pakistani news channels (thanks to youtube) but could never get to know the actual problem…

    October 27, 2013 at 8:21 am

  26. Just read this. This is so beautiful :’O

    March 18, 2014 at 10:48 am

  27. miss.mysterious

    Waaaw! ^_^
    My fav part

    To the point that made me sore.
    They made me live again!
    I’m dead.
    I’m living.

    WOW~

    June 17, 2015 at 1:11 pm

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