Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

First Part

Let’s end this lie game
You don’t care, I neither do
We will part our waysMariaI

‘Hiking with Haiku’ ~ Format: 5-7-5 poetry ~ Haiku #4 ~ Randomly Abstract

41 responses

  1. rjl2727

    ouch! that hurts, for you or who i don’t know

    October 27, 2013 at 7:17 pm

    • It doesn’t hurt. It feels awesome.

      October 27, 2013 at 8:38 pm

      • rjl2727

        ah, i am so glad for you. it’s like putting that final nail in the coffin, no?

        October 27, 2013 at 9:12 pm

        • It’s but the first part.

          And only a haiku.

          October 27, 2013 at 9:18 pm

          • rjl2727

            ok. so, get busy with the rest, and finish putting it to rest… it’s not that hard once you reconcile to yourself it is dead, and that is the hardest part.

            October 27, 2013 at 9:23 pm

  2. Abhi kuchh hi fin pehle to mile the…
    Parting so early?
    Please don’t…😛

    Keep on shouting, debating and complaining silently…
    I still have to learn that trick

    And even if you don’t keep writing…🙂

    October 27, 2013 at 8:04 pm

    • And even if you don’t… at least keep writing

      October 27, 2013 at 8:06 pm

      • Ahaan! Right. Abhi to mile the..😉

        That trick is easy.
        And I’ll keep on writing forever, hopefully.🙂 Somewhere, anywhere, but I’ll keep writing.

        October 27, 2013 at 8:42 pm

        • yeh hui na baat!
          bus us ‘somewhere’, ‘anywhere’ ke whereabouts bataati rehna… taaki main somewhere anywhere se all time aapko padhta rahoon…🙂

          October 27, 2013 at 9:10 pm

          • Yeah right.🙂 My journal, and my sketchbook, chahye?

            October 27, 2013 at 9:18 pm

          • Haan Haan… Chaahiye… Bilkut chahiye!🙂

            BTW Is this correct…
            بارش ہوں گی … ضرور ہوں گی …
            Baarishen hongi… zaroor hongi…

            October 27, 2013 at 9:25 pm

          • Correct, yup.
            Or you could write:
            بارشیں ہوں گی … ضرور ہوں گی

            October 27, 2013 at 9:27 pm

          • You changed the ‘baarishen’ part?
            What’s the difference?

            October 27, 2013 at 9:30 pm

          • Yeah, because ‘baarishen’ has ‘y’ and ‘n’ in the end, in Urdu.
            بارش is baarish.
            بارشیں is baarishen. Plural.

            October 27, 2013 at 9:32 pm

          • Hmm… got it!

            This reminds me of a question…

            Do you understand the concept of ‘maatra’ or have you ever heard it?

            Because I had a difficult time explaining it to lala… a few months ago… I was wondering if it is a completely foreing concept to you?

            October 27, 2013 at 9:38 pm

          • Maatra? I’ve no idea. What is it?

            October 27, 2013 at 9:39 pm

          • Okay… Difficult to explain…

            They are basically ‘vowel marks’… Let us see…
            generally the letters are written side by side… E.g. kamal (lotus) is written as


            where ka क is ma म is and la is ल

            No if ‘komal’ (soft/tender) is to be written
            the ‘normal’ way would be

            ka + o + ma +la
            that is
            क + ओ + म + ल
            but it is written as


            the mark after क stands for ओ and is hence called the maatra for ओ

            Likewise… every vowel gets modified when used after a consonant in a word… the modified form is called the maatra…

            Got it?

            October 27, 2013 at 9:54 pm

          • Whaaaaaaaat?
            I mean okay, I’ll re-read this until it gets in.🙂

            October 27, 2013 at 9:57 pm

          • 🙂 I understand… its difficult for the first time😉

            Try try… and ask wherever you get stuck…
            Dheere dheere hindi bhi seekh lijiye…😉 Warna Kanpur aakar poora maza nahin le paayiyega😛

            October 27, 2013 at 10:03 pm

          • Sure!! (=
            I won’t need hindi in Kanpur though. They’ll easily get my Urdu.😉

            October 27, 2013 at 10:06 pm

          • Approximately true🙂

            October 27, 2013 at 10:10 pm

  3. Oh dear, sorry. Wonderful Haiku, though!

    October 27, 2013 at 8:23 pm

  4. I shout,I complain,I debate

    Vey loudly🙂
    I like your version better though🙂

    October 28, 2013 at 12:40 am

    • That’s great!🙂
      It isn’t like I never say. I do say, and I do complain and all that. But then I leave those things unsaid which I know won’t make a difference either way.. And that is about the times when words fail, and silence remains. And silence rules.

      October 28, 2013 at 12:44 am

      • Ab socha hai k pather k sanam poojunga….
        Takey uktaun to takra b sakun,mar b sakun

        Hmmm I like your policy🙂

        October 28, 2013 at 12:52 am

        • Sigh. This is awesome.
          “Takey uktaun to takra b sakun,mar b sakun “

          October 28, 2013 at 12:54 am

          • yes Maria but we ended up with a blog instead🙂 Lucky us🙂

            October 28, 2013 at 1:07 am

          • hah right🙂 Lucky us!
            Though I still love the other idea.

            October 28, 2013 at 1:12 am

  5. oh mariaa… how painful.. how great! how deep.. this silence.. tears of the heart!!

    October 28, 2013 at 10:46 pm

    • Haena? Thank you.😉
      Welcome to WordPress finally! Looking forward to reading your amazing things.

      October 28, 2013 at 11:59 pm

      • @thank you.🙂
        @wordpress. lol.yeah..but I still need your help.. and yea I.A soon you’ll get to read me.;)

        October 29, 2013 at 3:42 pm

  6. WordsFallFromMyEyes

    Perfectly said.

    October 31, 2013 at 7:33 am

  7. shouting and complaining silently is the best we can do in hard times.

    November 11, 2013 at 10:10 pm

  8. shout. complain. debate. Silently…
    just lovely lines lady.

    December 27, 2013 at 6:34 pm

    • Thank you ^_^ That’s what most of us end up doing I guess. Silent debates, silent complaints..

      December 27, 2013 at 10:04 pm

  9. miss.mysterious

    *thumbs up* *gives hig*😀

    June 24, 2015 at 12:18 pm

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