Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

تتلی

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پیاری تتلی۔۔ تم اڑتی کیوں نہیں ہو؟ یہ درندوں کی دنیا ہے۔۔ یہاں بھلا تمھارا کیا کام؟

تم اڑ جاؤ ۔۔ ایسا کرو ھمیشہ کے لئے اڑ جاؤ۔۔

یہ دنیا تمھارے لئے نہیں ہے۔۔ تم اپنے باغ میں جا کر گھومو، پھرو، میں کچھ نہیں کہوں گا۔

ہاں اگر یہیں بیٹھی رھیں تو میں تمھیں مَسل دونگا۔

 

مگر میں جاؤں کہاں پیارے؟ میرے پَر تو تم کاٹ چکے ہو؟

اس رنگین دنیا میں بےشک میرا کوئی کام نہیں۔ مگر تم خدارا مجھے یہیں رہنے دو۔۔ درندوں کی دنیا میں۔۔

ذات کے پرندے بہرحال ‘خودی’ کے درندوں سے بہتر ہوتے ہیں۔۔

 اکیلی اس دنیا کی طرف گئی تو واپسی ناممکن ہوجائےگی۔ تم سمجھتے کیوں نھیں ہو؟

39 responses

  1. Translation please… The translation by google was good… I got the gist but not the complete meaning…

    November 18, 2013 at 6:17 pm

    • Urdu-English me theek rahega?

      November 18, 2013 at 8:01 pm

      • Yup… Aap roman script mein urdu bhi likh sakti hain… I guess it would be easier for you…

        November 18, 2013 at 8:17 pm

        • Piyari titli..
          tm urrti kyun nahi ho?
          Ye darindon ki dunya hae
          Yahan bhala tmhara kiya kaam?…
          Tm urr jao! Aesa karo hamesha ke lye urr jao!
          Ye dunya tmhary lye nahi hae…Tm apny bagh me ghoomo, phiro, mae kuch nahi kahun ga.
          Han agar yaheen bethi rhiin tou mae tmhe masal dunga.

          Magar mae jaun kahan piyaray? Mery parr tou tm kaat chuky ho?
          Iss rangeen dunya me beshak mera koyi kaam nahi..
          Magar tm Khudara mjhay yaheen rehny do.. Darindon ki dunya mei..
          Zaat ke parinday beharhaal ‘khudi’ ke darindon se behtar hoty haen.
          Akeli is dunya ki taraf gyi tou wapsi na mumkin hojaegi.
          Tm samajhty kyun nahi ho?

          * darinday (vulture)

          November 18, 2013 at 9:00 pm

          • Wonderful lines Maria… Wonderful message… Loved it

            November 18, 2013 at 10:12 pm

          • Shukriya.

            November 18, 2013 at 10:26 pm

  2. ذات کے پرندے بہرحال ‘خودی’ کے درندوں سے بہتر ھوتے ھیں۔۔
    *thumbs up*
    Very well written as usual. I have a detailed reply coming(in the process, my brain knows the answer but my pen doesnt abhi toh wait) to this but right now have to study so baad mein fursat se insha’Allah🙂

    November 18, 2013 at 6:20 pm

    • Jazakillah (: I will love your detailed reply bhi. You’re awesome, bus.

      November 18, 2013 at 6:35 pm

  3. Mariaaaaa! I was making my mind to write somthting on ‘BUTTERFLIES’😛
    Btw loved it!

    November 18, 2013 at 7:32 pm

    • Aray wah! Tou friends isi ko to kehty haen!😉 You write your thing, mae parhny arahi hun!🙂

      November 18, 2013 at 7:33 pm

      • Yup sure! But iss ka number baad me ayega. Cause line me abhi dusre plots bhi maujood hain!😉

        November 18, 2013 at 7:37 pm

  4. O pyari titli mera paighaam bhi sunna
    Jo baat kisi ko kabi kahi naheen
    Wo mujh se aj sar-eaam bhi sunna

    ye duniya chahay zalim sahi hai tu apni
    Aur apnay chahay lakh zakham den
    Akhir ko tu apnay he rehtay hain

    Apnun k begair tumhari zaat ki gehrae
    Tum hi ko nigal jaay gi aik din
    Akhir ko wo ‘zaat’ bhi tu aik ‘apna’ hai na !

    O pyari titli Kataay parun k sath bhi
    Totay wajood aur bikhray hoslun k sath
    Ye zindagi tu akhir tumhin ko nibhani hai

    Usey samjhanay k bajaay aj khud ko ye samjhao
    K ‘zaat’ pa lo gi tu ‘khudi’ tumharay kadmun me ho gi
    Pher darinday bhi apna asar kho den gay aur rangeeniyan bhi !

    Khush raho Pyari titli🙂

    I Love it…completely awesome ! Superb in-depth and extremely philosophical explanation of Reality !

    November 18, 2013 at 8:24 pm

    • ye duniya chahay zalim sahi hai tu apni
      Aur apnay chahay lakh zakham den
      Akhir ko tu apnay he rehtay hain

      Hm.. Waqai. Ye dunya chahay zalim sahi hy tou apni. Apny chahy zakham bhi den haen tou apny. Even darinday, wo bhi. Titli unhi ke sath jeeti hy. Waheen pe rehti hy.. Bina parr ke bhi urrti hy. Phir masall di jati hy?

      Apnun k begair tumhari zaat ki gehrae
      Tum hi ko nigal jaay gi aik din
      Akhir ko wo ‘zaat’ bhi tu aik ‘apna’ hai na !

      Lala I love this. Akhir wo zaat bhi tu aik apna hy na.. Sab se gehra ‘apna’. Sab se sachha ‘apna’. (: Wahid… Al-Wahid.

      Ye zindagi tu akhir tumhin ko nibhani hai :’) Guess that’s how life goes on.

      Usey samjhanay k bajaay aj khud ko ye samjhao
      K ‘zaat’ pa lo gi tu ‘khudi’ tumharay kadmun me ho gi
      Pher darinday bhi apna asar kho den gay aur rangeeniyan bhi !

      Wo nhi samjhay ga. Thek hae phir, titli samajh legi. (: Love love love these lines.

      November 18, 2013 at 8:43 pm

      • God!! How do u guys get into this philosophical mode? I envy you people. Maybe one has to be serious for that😉

        November 18, 2013 at 8:59 pm

      • Thank you Maria🙂 Love you.

        November 21, 2013 at 3:41 pm

    • 🙂 Kya likha yaar… Wonderful… Wonderful… Tum dono ki kavita bahut achchhi thi… Le mere taraf se ek…

      Zaalim hai dunia, zalim zamaana
      Zalim hi gaate hain ye maut ka taraana
      Darindey hain ek tak nazarein jamaaye
      Aur dhokha bhi dete hain apne hi hamsaaye

      Par O ri titli!

      Is jahaan mein sirf dhokha nahin hai milta
      Dhokhe ki chaadar tale ek sapna bhi hai palta
      Is jahaan ki phool aur kaliyaan
      Is jahaan ke neher aur nadiyaan
      Rasta dekh rahi hain tera
      Intezaar kar rahi hain tera

      Ja is zalim duniya ke dil mein
      Pyaar ka deep jalaa ja
      Ur aise ki darinde dar jaayen
      Aur duniya rangeen banaa ja…

      Utni achhi nahin bani… but phir bhi… baad mein kabhi phir try karoonga🙂

      November 18, 2013 at 10:04 pm

      • Ab mae kiya kahun? Aap log itna speechless krdety haen mujhy!🙂
        Bohat achi likhi hy.. Touched.

        “Zalim hi gaate hain ye maut ka taraana”
        Ja is zalim duniya ke dil mein
        Pyaar ka deep jalaa ja
        Ur aise ki darinde dar jaayen
        Aur duniya rangeen banaa ja…

        Titli yehi karti hy. . Rang phelati hy. Yehi karegi. Rang phelaegi. Jab tk rahegi.
        You asked on your blog why we’d think your response poems help. They are considered ‘helpful’ (actually useful) because they give the messages of positivity, and hope. Har dafa.🙂

        November 18, 2013 at 10:24 pm

        • Dhanyawaad for appreciating this bekaar si kavita…😛

          Bilkul phailaayegi… rang bhi, khushiyaan bhi aur bachpan bhi…🙂

          And you know why they are full of positivity and hope? Because I feel that the world is full of positivity and hope… There are joys, smiles and happiness… Agreed that there are pains and strife and struggle… But looking at the bigger picture… I feel that the world is a constant interplay between good and bad… And the fact that this interplay exists is itself wonderful, beautiful, joyous and grand…

          So jab bhi koi dukh aur deppression mein kavita likhta hai, mujhe lagta hai ki bande ko ehsaas hi nahin hai is mahaan khushi ka… So koshish karta hoon ki thodi khushi ka ehsaas use bhi ho jaaye… bus…🙂

          Aur is liye generally main dukh waali poems nahin likhta… Aur kisi din agar likha to samajh lena… something is seriously wrong…

          November 19, 2013 at 9:07 am

          • Lecture thoda jyada lamba ho gaya na?😛

            November 19, 2013 at 9:08 am

          • Wonderful insight.. The world really is full of beauty and positivity. The absence of love isn’t hate, but the failure to feel it, is. “The fact that this interplay exists is itself wonderful, beautiful, joyous and grand.” Indeed. And that’s how silver linings appear, and gloomy times fade. I like your idea of spreading positivity, in efforts to make others realize what they’re missing.
            “generally main dukh waali poems nahin likhta… Aur kisi din agar likha to samajh lena… something is seriously wrong…” Likhye ga bhi nahi. In fact likhye ga, but end me ‘hope’ dalyega. Because end me hope zaroor hoti hy.🙂
            Anyways, lecture de ke we never tell ye lecture tha.😉

            November 19, 2013 at 5:38 pm

          • Haha… Woh end mein hope ka bhi reason hai… Generally main poems ulte taraf se likhta hoon😛. I mean last line first… and then the first to the second last line…😉

            Woh kya hai na… paida hi ulta hua tha…😉

            ” lecture de ke we never tell ye lecture tha”
            Shall I read between the lines?🙂

            November 19, 2013 at 8:21 pm

      • Aray wah ! Bohat achi bani hai tum tu meray ustaad ho you know that🙂 Love it.

        November 21, 2013 at 3:43 pm

        • Dosti ko dosti hi rehne de na… Bekaar ustaad banaa rahi hai mujhe… Faltu mein inequality failaa rahi hai…😛😉

          November 21, 2013 at 5:11 pm

          • Jo b kaho ye fact tu chup nae sakta…Really I started doing poetry after reading and getting inspired from you🙂

            November 23, 2013 at 9:15 pm

          • 🙂 You know I am glad I could do something good… atleast…

            November 23, 2013 at 9:17 pm

  5. 🙂 This is marvelous…. Maria… Very very real and sensitive.. very potent.
    And then when it succeeds to make Butterfly attempt coming out of her shell…. It becomes an inspiring tale… Then the response pieces of Lala and Arindam… (You guys supporting each other…) It becomes a reminder, that relationship is about caring…
    And Maria… you should do more Urdu poetry… Lines that come out of you… does wonders!

    November 19, 2013 at 11:35 am

    • Thank you very kindly for your appreciation. (: Their responses and your comments have greatly helped in completing the butterfly journey.

      November 19, 2013 at 5:52 pm

  6. Wow!! Great poem, and equally amazing responses. I feel almost embarrassed commenting because I don’t have the words to compliment the other responses.

    November 19, 2013 at 7:50 pm

    • Thank you. (: All these responses are great indeed. But your comments, as always, mean a lot.🙂

      November 19, 2013 at 10:25 pm

  7. Waise kis zaalim ki wajah se aapki neend phir se toot gayi?😛

    November 19, 2013 at 8:25 pm

    • Kisi ki waja se nhi, periodic wake-ups bus.🙂

      November 19, 2013 at 8:27 pm

      • Hmm… Very interesting… Ab to so jaaiye… 11 days left…

        November 19, 2013 at 8:29 pm

  8. first thing clicked my mind after reading is Titliyan by Strings.
    “Titaliyaan Yaadon Ki Udati Jaaye
    Rango Mein Mujhse Kuchh Kehati Jaaye”

    Us rang ka kia rang jo udhan bharnay ke bad nazar aye.

    November 24, 2013 at 12:27 pm

  9. wow zabardst

    November 25, 2013 at 5:41 pm

  10. Achi nazm hay.
    Moqa mila tu ap ki enlgish poems bhi parhonga.

    November 26, 2013 at 6:32 pm

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