Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

The Little Mermaid


You will still have the same floating gracefulness of movement, and no dancer will ever tread so lightly; but at every step you take it will feel as if you were treading upon sharp knives, and that the blood must flow. If you will bear all this, I will help you.
The Little Mermaid, by Hans Christian Andersen (1805-1875)

Leaning her white arms
at the vessel’s edge she stood
Sunlight brings death

‘Hold this knife and plunge
into the lover’s heart, quick!
Gain eternity.’

Buy his life for mine?
Hands trembling, she flung it far
Jumped off from the cruise

The sea returned her
Immortality bestowed
‘You’ve suffered enough.’

‘Hiking with Haiku’ ~ Format: 5-7-5 poetry ~ Haiku #6 ~ Randomly Abstract

19 responses

  1. I had to read it thrice or more to follow a sense of direction. (My bad!)
    But once I put the pieces together, I realized the awe behind this. You’re such a pro at Haikus, Maria.😀

    December 18, 2013 at 4:57 pm

    • Thank you, Ghalia.🙂 I seriously don’t know the rules and structure of a proper haiku, but I like doing them because they’re short and they speak. These four are about ‘the little mermaid’ from Andersen’s story. Glad you liked.🙂

      December 18, 2013 at 5:41 pm

      • Neither do I. But practice makes a man perfect. Plus, personally, if the poetry fails to convey its meaning properly, structure isn’t worth a damn.😉
        I checked our that link ‘The Little Mermaid’. I haven’t read it so far, but I’ll let you know. It seems en-captivating, totally.🙂

        December 19, 2013 at 3:33 pm

        • Ahan. Practice makes perfect, perfection is an illusion, illusion is the first of all pleasures.😀
          I was basically searching for something ‘utopian’ to inspire me when stumbled upon this. The expressions, the agony, those quotations and scenes in the story were so amazingly put ke phir I decided to write about it.🙂

          December 19, 2013 at 4:52 pm

          • Ayeiinn Nahi. :3
            I think Perfection is an achievement. A daunting one, but there are ways to attain it, and once you do, you are Oh-so-awesome. ^_^ Plus, the race for Perfection co-joins you to excellence.😉

            That’s great. You did an amazing job waise. (Y)

            December 19, 2013 at 9:11 pm

          • Haey, that’s even better than Voltaire. =p
            I like your views, gave me a better perception. But see, ‘the race to perfection co-joins you to excellence’ theek, but PERFECTION as in real perfection, does that exist?
            Excellence does, but even those that we idealize aren’t perfect. Or maybe they’re some ways to attain it as you said, and perfection lies in the way only.

            December 19, 2013 at 9:30 pm

          • Lol There’s only one wayto find out, isn’t there?😉

            December 19, 2013 at 9:42 pm

          • Ha, meet you there.😉

            December 19, 2013 at 9:59 pm

          • Woah. Le Maria is pretty akalmand. ^_^

            December 19, 2013 at 10:22 pm

          • Haha. Urra lo.

            December 19, 2013 at 10:25 pm

          • Lulz. Love you. :3

            December 19, 2013 at 10:26 pm

          • Ji, theek. I do too. =D

            December 19, 2013 at 10:28 pm

  2. u r just amazing at watever u do! whether haiku or no haiku..
    im happy to b back..and im doubly delighted to read from meri pyaari maria🙂

    December 20, 2013 at 10:21 pm

    • Welcome back!❤
      And thank you for your lovely comment.🙂 Stay blessed!

      December 20, 2013 at 10:31 pm

  3. Maria! This one is beautiful!

    May 27, 2014 at 8:17 pm

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