To you, I want to give flowers–I don’t mind that being cliched–
Roses, wrapped in ribbons. Letters, soaked in perfume. Stars.
Unnecessary though it might be, I want to tell you again and so often
Love, how much I have come to love you that I’ve now begun to live you.
Your thought is my drug, your memory is heaven’s mercy,
Your presence is an air without which my lungs parch up.
Oh the Sun of my universe, the Light of my soul!
Undying is my adoration–like a forever flowing ocean.
Remember this: my gift to you is my heart. I am yours.
Some day you’ll see. That some day, we will be.
Written in response to Writing 201 challenge: write something about a gift, use a simile. Poem form: acrostic. (The first letters of each line together form a special word which is the theme here.) Hi.
This is so beautiful!!
Thank you! ❤
Absolutely love it!
So pleased to know that! Thanks!
This is lovely. I was cruising the Commons for inspiration to do MY acrostic (which means you’re not last), and this totally gave it to me.
Oh Rhoda, thank you so much! I am glad it did. I really want to read yours now. (Oh and good luck for today!) ❤
Love it! Very well done.
Kathy! That’s so sweet of you. Thank you!
Dear Randomly Abstract, ditto with the previous comments. Reading this made me slow down and appreciate life. I can tell it’s from the heart. Beautiful.
Hello, kind one! I love your comment so much! Thank you for making my day. I hope you have a great one. 🙂
I love the sentiment, I feel that you took a lot of care and time to write this, I like it!
Hey Alexander! So glad to see you again! Honestly, this one did take much… 🙂 Thank you ever so much for reading!
Beautifully written. This poem flows nicely. I reread it several times. Love it!
Thanks a million, Sabine! Your comment truly brought joy. Glad you liked it. x
You are very welcome! 😊
Beautiful. 🙂
Thank you. x
Lovlay ❤
Shukran! ♥
Afwan ❤
Yay! This is a kilig-inducing poem!!! So sweeet!
Haha thank you so much! Your comment is the sweetest itself. Good day!
You’re welcome. This is just so kilig!
😀 x
This is so good that it inspired me to try my hand at writing an acrostic poem. Sad to say it turned out to be .. er.. not very noteworthy.
Aray that is so cool! 😀 Did you have fun doing it? I want to seee.
Oh, I don’t know if I had fun. More like scratched the scalp off my head searching for words 😀
Here you go:
Behold!
Emperor of the world!
Holder of the Crown!
Under whom the Kingdom
Dares to exert
A mighty frown, on
All those who don’t
Accede, to the
Demands of the
Mad king, who
Is but a Djinn
(Kill me now)
Ahaha! That’s actually amazing. So much power in these lines. And I want to write one in Urdu now. xD
Hahaha, you’re too polite 😀
Go ahead. I’ll be keeping an eye out.
I’ll try, insha Allah. 😀 You should, too. Urdu acrostics, that would be new.
My Urdu knowledge is rudimentary. So that won’t work. I’ll see if I can come up with something less puke-inducing in English (or Hindi).
Hindi, yes. You have Faraz and Ghalib I think, on your blog. Do try! 🙂
In sha Allah 🙂
This one is so cool. I’m your fan, autograph please? 🙂
Your poems have been making me understand Ma’m Huma’s lectures. Thanks so much :p
Hahaha. Jazakillah, Mahaay.
I need to know about Mam Huma’s lectures. :p
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Sure, Mario.
okay you know this is amazing, right?
*_*
tinkererrrr. thank you xx
I came across your blog through sulphurman’s and you’re as good as he says you are! 🙂
I think this is a really cool way of writing poems!
Hello neighbor!
Thank you so much! I am reaaally glad you think so. 🙂
This is so cool, Mario! Of course beautiful as well! 😀 ❤
Like me? ^_^
“how much I have come to love you that I’ve now begun to ‘live’ you” …Twin I’m always at loss of words when I read your poetry, it’s baffling how beautifully you write, really…
I am at a loss of words filhal, honestly. Thank you so much for the kind comment, twinny. Much love to you.
You are welcome ❤
Maria, Love, how much I have come to love you that I’ve now begun to live you. I LOVE this line so so much. Kuch words hotay hain na jin ko perh k apka dil kerta hai baar baar perho aur pher yaad ker k memory me save ker lu. Aisi line hai. Beautiful poetry. Really beautiful.
I really wish I could write about love once again. But I can’t right now. You are amazing at this. Really.