Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

Lost.

concretepoem_randomlyabstract

[In response to writing challenge 201: cold, concrete poetry. ]

36 responses

  1. I love it. Simple and powerful. Bullseye that is.

    October 16, 2015 at 3:29 am

  2. I love the house shape. Very good post!

    October 16, 2015 at 3:39 am

    • Thank you. Your constant support and kind feedback during this course has meant a lot to me.πŸ™‚

      October 16, 2015 at 5:15 pm

  3. Very well done, strong message too.

    October 16, 2015 at 3:45 am

  4. Like it. I couldn’t do that πŸ˜ƒ

    October 16, 2015 at 4:11 am

  5. It is such a unique way of using the prompts, I like it.πŸ™‚

    October 16, 2015 at 4:25 am

  6. Really great

    October 16, 2015 at 4:45 am

  7. Amazing as always.πŸ™‚ I’m very proud of you.

    October 16, 2015 at 6:21 am

  8. Creative, I have been reading other’s posts and their take on the prompt. And you have, in so little of words, delivered your thoughts so powerfully.

    October 16, 2015 at 6:43 am

    • Hey, Aaliyah Zahra! First of all, I love your name. And since I’ve been seeing you on sulphurman’s blog for some time, I’ve developed this silent appreciation for the Dilli-mijaz already. Which is to say, I am really glad to see you.
      Thank you so much for your kind comment.

      October 16, 2015 at 5:29 pm

      • Hi Ria. Thank you. And I love your name too.
        Haha Ershad is my third brother who is very supportive of my work and we often stray away from commenting on each other’s works. And thank you. Haha dilli-mijaz.
        I am glad to have come across your blog. Creative people inspire me and help me strive to become my best so I shall be looking out for your postsπŸ™‚

        October 16, 2015 at 6:58 pm

        • Oh, add Ma before that. I’ve the name of the Prophet’s wife.πŸ™‚
          Thank you, too. It feels great connecting with you!

          October 16, 2015 at 7:19 pm

          • Maria?? That’s an even more beautiful name masha AllahπŸ™‚

            October 16, 2015 at 7:21 pm

          • Haha yes, Maria it is. Jazakillah!

            October 16, 2015 at 7:23 pm

  9. This is awesome!

    October 16, 2015 at 8:51 am

  10. asimmulla

    your rhyme is far ahead of time…… love it……… keep it up..

    October 16, 2015 at 3:38 pm

  11. Hiba

    The workings of your brain blow me away.

    October 16, 2015 at 6:14 pm

  12. I always try to avoid commenting on your posts the first time I read them. Because I know something else with strike my mind on subsequent readings. This time the red font struck me. That was inspired.

    October 16, 2015 at 7:39 pm

    • And your words always, always mean so much. Thank you kindly. :’)

      October 16, 2015 at 8:02 pm

  13. Provocative. Thoughtful. And the white and red text against black was an artful choice. You ask a good question and invite us to ask that question, too. Thanks!

    October 18, 2015 at 2:10 am

  14. Yar. Thora sa talent mujhy bhe inject kar do apna please?

    October 18, 2015 at 5:31 pm

  15. Perfecto!

    October 19, 2015 at 6:41 pm

  16. I have tried multiple time to write a concrete poetry, ir never worked out. You on the otherhand, you Nailed it! πŸ˜„

    October 27, 2015 at 6:16 pm

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