I wish it was possible. to gain back. what I have lost. I don’t regret. everything. I only want. what I had.
When you came. I wasn’t ready. as a consequence. I have lost. a lot. since then.
Confidence. peace. writing. I saw myself, how freedom turns into. fear. a fear that you. cannot. name. tame. cannot show. cannot hide.
I saw what a void is. what it is like. to be. a mess. I saw also. that. God really is there.
I wish. I could move. I am not. a tree. but I think. I am. a tree. I know I should not. be.
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Very good. I like the use of the periods!
I agree with writersdream9. The beauty of this piece depends on the pauses. Those full stops are placed with precision. Removing them would turn this into something totally different. Creative stuff.
The Ending had me…..
The whole feel of the poem, the pause, the breaks, the fluidity in between… Ahhh… words won’t ever be enough here…
loved it, each full stop shares a whole new story, brilliantly written
Thank you!!
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Beautifully written! I know where you are coming from here. Just an amazing read!
I am sorry. I am following you for a while but idk why i dont get your posts on my reader. I will give your blog a detailed read when i am free in the evening tomorrow. About this post i will just say…. brilliant!
Np about that:) Thank you!
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“I saw what a void is. what it is like. to be. a mess. I saw also. that. God really is there.”
It’s been a while that i wanted to write about this void. Now i think you have done this better.
Only if writing about voids could fix them somehow.
It does help. in Its own way.
Your writing is always so good Maria. This one is no exception.
All I can say is, ‘life is not stagnant’. Neither is time. This time right now is our life, and it’s made up of our choices. I hope that makes sense.
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Thank you, Staci. You are right, life isn’t stagnant. It’s made up of our choices but choices alone don’t make it? Or maybe they do..?
It’s always great to hear from you. ❤
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